Post by aquamarine on Jul 14, 2012 22:38:14 GMT -6
((Hey I thought I might post this since I'm going away. It's the beginning of my story. Like before if you guys can give me some constructive criticism it would be greatly appreciated.))
Abigail felt her way through the tall grass and listened to the sound of the forest. Snap! Abigail turned around quickly but quietly with her bow in bow in hand and an arrow at ready towards the sound. She herd light frolicking hoof beats and knew it was a dear and that it was heading toward Abigail. Hearing the hoof beats come toward her, Abigail quickly aimed her bow at the sound and fired an arrow straight. The deer feel to the ground with a loud thud. Yes!! She thought I hit it. She ran over to where she heard the deer fall and retrieved her arrow.I Got it in the eye. After skinning and butchering the deer Abigail felt around for wood and started a fire and began to cook the meat.
“Well done Abby” Fabian’s voice rang through Abigail’s ears as he walked towards her from behind a tree. She smiled as she heard him approach. Where would she be without him. Fabian was Abigail's trainer and has been with her since she was orphaned “I think you’re ready”.
“Do you really think so?” Abigail said “I thought I still had to learn more before… well you know I find him… or her.” Feeling the soft fabric in her pack, Abigail wrapped the cooked meat in soft cloth and placed it in her bag.
“You think that much about it?” Fabian asked.
“I’ll get my sight back when I do find my spirit mate” Abigail replied. Fabian didn’t answer. “Do you think mine already found me?”
“Most likely” Fabian said. “Let’s go. The council will have to have to know that you’re ready.” Abigail sighed.
“That will take a while” Abigail said.
“No worries you’ll only need to come in for part of it.” Fabian said and started to guide her towards their camp. “It’ll take us a day to get home so we’ll spend the night here. It’s almost dark anyway”
“Even if I do only have to go for a bit of it my part will still take forever” Abigail stated. “I wonder why I have to go if all you need to do is tell them that I’m ready” Fabian didn’t answer but Abigail could tell his breathing changed.
.… That all that he needs to do right? In silence Fabian lead Abigail to her tent and started to head to his. “That’s all that’s gonna happen right? You’re just gonna tell them I’m ready right…R-right?”
Abigail heard Fabian face her “just get some sleep you have a big day tomorrow and you need to be ready as well.” Abigail’s heart raced at the sound of Fabian’s words… I’ll have to prove myself. She said and in a few minutes she slowly fell into a deep sleep.
Abigail felt her way through the tall grass and listened to the sound of the forest. Snap! Abigail turned around quickly but quietly with her bow in bow in hand and an arrow at ready towards the sound. She herd light frolicking hoof beats and knew it was a dear and that it was heading toward Abigail. Hearing the hoof beats come toward her, Abigail quickly aimed her bow at the sound and fired an arrow straight. The deer feel to the ground with a loud thud. Yes!! She thought I hit it. She ran over to where she heard the deer fall and retrieved her arrow.I Got it in the eye. After skinning and butchering the deer Abigail felt around for wood and started a fire and began to cook the meat.
“Well done Abby” Fabian’s voice rang through Abigail’s ears as he walked towards her from behind a tree. She smiled as she heard him approach. Where would she be without him. Fabian was Abigail's trainer and has been with her since she was orphaned “I think you’re ready”.
“Do you really think so?” Abigail said “I thought I still had to learn more before… well you know I find him… or her.” Feeling the soft fabric in her pack, Abigail wrapped the cooked meat in soft cloth and placed it in her bag.
“You think that much about it?” Fabian asked.
“I’ll get my sight back when I do find my spirit mate” Abigail replied. Fabian didn’t answer. “Do you think mine already found me?”
“Most likely” Fabian said. “Let’s go. The council will have to have to know that you’re ready.” Abigail sighed.
“That will take a while” Abigail said.
“No worries you’ll only need to come in for part of it.” Fabian said and started to guide her towards their camp. “It’ll take us a day to get home so we’ll spend the night here. It’s almost dark anyway”
“Even if I do only have to go for a bit of it my part will still take forever” Abigail stated. “I wonder why I have to go if all you need to do is tell them that I’m ready” Fabian didn’t answer but Abigail could tell his breathing changed.
.… That all that he needs to do right? In silence Fabian lead Abigail to her tent and started to head to his. “That’s all that’s gonna happen right? You’re just gonna tell them I’m ready right…R-right?”
Abigail heard Fabian face her “just get some sleep you have a big day tomorrow and you need to be ready as well.” Abigail’s heart raced at the sound of Fabian’s words… I’ll have to prove myself. She said and in a few minutes she slowly fell into a deep sleep.