Soules (loner)

[nahash]

Name: Soules

Gender: Male

Race: Grey Wolf

Sub-Race: N/A

Breed: Red Wolf

Pack: N/A

Rank: N/A

Appearance: Soules is rusty red on his back and dusty tan on his stomach. His nap is a darker red that the rest of his body. His ears are torn from years of fighting and are grey. He is missing his right eye and has three deep scars running from his eyebrow, across his empty eye socket and down his cheek. His remaining eyes is dark red and flaked with gold.

Personality: he is very polite and proper especially in the presence of a lady. Women are his weakness he falls in love easily. He tends to fall for the damsel in distress type. He likes having someone to protect as it gives meaning to his fights. Years of fighting have left him cold and calculative when he is around strangers. Seeing so much death has also left him cynical with a dark sense of humor.

Magic: N/A

Skills: skilled at fighting and as a hunter

Biography: Soules has been a loner since he left his parents pack as a teen. He has had to fight to survive, never stopping in one place for long. He has a strong sense of justice and makes a habit of sticking his nose in other people’s problems. This has earned him a great number of enemies. He has spent most of his life working as a mercenary, not because he likes the work but because he is good at it.

[Felypsa]

Hey Nahash, any chance you could write out more detail in "Personality" and "Biography"? It's a bit bare-bones right now, and I know you're capable of more than that. xD They should each be a decent-length paragraph, at minimum.

[nahash]

Is that better, this is a character from anther site and his normal bio wont work which is why it is so short.

[Felypsa]

We could still use more detail. C': Like, for Personality, how does he treat his friends? What does he like/dislike? What makes him happy, if anything? Does he have a sense of humor at all? What kind of females does he like? (Also, make sure you capitalize properly at the beginning of the sentences in this section n.n;; )

And the Bio is still really vague. Why did he leave his parents as a teen? Why does he make so many enemies? It doesn't seem like he's a terribly unpleasant person from his Personality, so it seems strange that he keeps running into people who want to fight him. And also, you allude to him seeing "so much death" in his Personality, but there isn't any of that in his Bio. Is he a soldier? A mercenary? We just need more details about who he's been fighting all this time, and why.

Just consider these questions and take the time to write them in. There's no rush! We'd rather you take as much time and put effort into this. :3

[nahash]

Fely your a big meany making my try and stuff I just wanted a quick RP XP

I hope that is good enough and sorry about the lack of capitalization, that was bad even by my poor grammatical standards.