wings

[Deleted]

on the wings of time
we flutter through the darkness
possessing a light we cannot see
shadow play and lavendar
dreams that are untouched
a careful end to the day
and sunset sky pink flushed

where the days go
into the hazy past
of thoughts and forgotten memories
the circling demons grasp
on the wings of a dragon
a quiet lullaby
singing in the spring dawning
never to say goodbye

longing for the truth
but never knowing why
understanding nothing
and trying not to lie
even though we fall
into the misty abyss of doubt
wonders will always lay ahead
for those who eternally love


This is my first poem ever... like, seriosuly. xD tell me what you think. It rambles a bit, and has no real ryhming structure, but I felt inspired, so tadah!!! Comments always welcome.[/size]

[Warlock]

I like it. Especially the first stanza. I don't write poetry much either... But I do love to read it!

[Deleted]

Yeah, I agree. The other two stanzas get a bit... stiff, I guess. Not as flowing as the first. -nodnod-

[Relairah]

Woah, I like it ^-^ It's very pretty and you did a good job =) I love adjectives...and that has a bunch of those n_n

[Deleted]

-blushes fiercely- I try, I try... -giggles- Thankies. -hands cookies to you both-[/size]

[selth9]

That's a good Job, especially for a first try!
I like the last paragraph thing and the subject of the whole poem.

[moonwolf]

I love it!